How Did the Second Empire Differ from the First?

How Did the Second Empire Differ from the First?

Ms. Gerst's Thesis Statement Examples 

#1 Although the Song Dynasty reveled in the Confucian principles codified during the First Empire, their predecessor Tang Dynasty broke with past traditions, permitting greater freedom for women, a trade-based economic system, and devotion to Buddhis, 

#2 Although the Song Dynasty seemingly reverted to Confucian ideals, it broke entirely with past, ushering in a new age of commercial, artistic, and technological revolutions, thereby changing now people lived in China until the arrival of the Mongols. 

#3 Sui dynasty rebuilt itself on the foundations of the Qin and Han dynasties, appealing to its belief systems, reconstructing the capital Chang'an and the Great Wall, and recreating a strong, central government after conquering rivals. 

Early World History Research Paper Rubric and Integrating Quotes

Attached HERE is the rubric I will use to grade your Early World History papers.

Today's class, if you were absent, focused on integrating quotations into your paper.  Here are some examples.

Original student example:

A book published during the Zhou Dynasty, translated to English, expresses the salience of war in Zhou culture, "The military is a great matter of the state. It is the ground of life and death" (Footnote her indicating this comes from Sunzi's The Art of War.)

Board example # 1

A book published during the Zhou Dynasty, translated to English, expressed the salience of war in Zhou culture: "The military is a great matter of the state. It is the ground of life and death." (FOOTNOTE here indicating this comes from Sunzi's The Art of War.)  Notice the past tense correction and the colon replacing the comma.

Board example #2

Sunzi's The Art of War described the prevalence of war during the reign of the Zhou.  Sunzi proclaimed "[t]he military is a great matter of the state. It is the ground of life and death." FOOTNOTE.

Board example # 3
According to Sunzi, "[t]he military is a great matter of the state."  FOOTNOTE.  The Zhou Dynasty prioritized war above all other government functions.  By engaging in battle, the Zhou believed they were strengthening the state by expanding their territorial power.  Notice this example analyzes the quote and does not just ask it to "speak for itself."

Example # 4

In closing, you could also not use quotes here and paraphrase instead.  In that case, you STILL have to use a footnote.

The Zhou Dynasty prioritized war above all other government functions.  By engaging in battle, the Zhou believed they were strengthening the state by expanding their territorial power.  To not do battle risked death of the state, the Zhou Dynasty itself. FOOTNOTE.